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PostSubject: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 7:53 pm

I'm not really good with fanfics, but I hope you enjoy this.
It won't just cover doppelgangers, but also ghosts. Scratch that, this is entirely about ghosts. Sort of an AU. But the places in the story... it will be referred from the real story*.

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Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3 and 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
Chapter 7
Chapter 8 [New!]

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 8:34 pm

Lumen, you are wonderful.

That's all I had to say.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 8:43 pm

Hmm, I can't say I understand what this is about...

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 8:45 pm

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Hmm, I can't say I understand what this is about...
It's because you don't know the story. XD
Azure knows, though. Cool

I was about to tell you in YM, but when I told you what it is about, you said "No thanks". XD

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 9:05 pm

Oh, so it's about the school ghost?

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 9:11 pm

Based on it a bit. But of course, I'll be only getting a few ideas out of it and leave the rest to me. And the entire thing is not focused on the ghost. XD

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 9:58 pm

Awesome crossover, Lumen! 8D

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 11:42 pm

Thanks! Don't tell them the name of the ghost, though.

IT WILL RUIN EVERYTHIIIING

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Wed Oct 19, 2011 11:52 pm

/me raised her hand.

I Got this feeling that I KNOW WHO IT IS! Azuuuuure, is it the one I think it is? Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Thu Oct 20, 2011 12:00 am

JUST DON'T TELL.
Please? *puppy eyes*

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Thu Oct 20, 2011 12:05 am

Swear not telling it! Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Thu Oct 20, 2011 12:28 am

Ahh, yeah. I gave out a hint when I told Azure about the fanfic...
I guess you know already who the ghost is. Razz

chapter 1:
 

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Sat Oct 22, 2011 5:30 pm

Chapter 2:
 
Enjoy XD
It's a bit shorter than the first one...

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Mon Oct 24, 2011 6:30 pm

No one's commenting... Sad

Chapter 3:
 

Chapter 4:
 

Gaah, why do I suck at writing horror!? D:

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Mon Oct 24, 2011 6:55 pm

You don't suck! I really enjoy reading it Very Happy I think there is less comments because we don't know the story as much as Fantasia story! But seriously, nice work Smile

(And I'm officially becaming the biggest fanfict-fan ever.)

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Mon Oct 24, 2011 7:18 pm

The reason I don't write for Fantasia anymore is because my last attempt is really, really OOC. And so horrible.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Mon Oct 24, 2011 7:32 pm

Can't be worst than someone... Wink

And I love this fanfict, for real.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 6:51 pm

Interesting :3c.

Umm... I hope you don't feel offended by my nitpicking >.< but an inconsistency in the number of girls at the beginning of the prologue slightly got stuck in my mind though...

'Their group had placed umbrellas beside the water, where near it was a wide concrete slab for the dam. Under the umbrella, FIVE girls sat.'

Yet after that, it was said to only have FOUR girls in the story >_<.


I find that the story is pretty engaging though ^__^.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 7:08 pm

Hey, not all the girls under the umbrella in the beginning went to swim. 8D But I'll edit out the first part. In the real-life story, there were four of them who died, but I have no information as of how many were they who went with them in the dam. XD

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 7:30 pm

Oh... I see ^__^. It was just the fact that there suddenly only seemed to be four girls left me puzzled, Lumen-san (May I call you Lumen-san?) XD. Good luck on writing your next chapter :3c.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 9:13 pm

Belle this isn't your fanfict.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 9:31 pm

I guess I don't have to post this fifth chapter anymore if someone posted hers already... on my thread.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 9:32 pm

Sent her a PM. I can simply just delete it, but she might get all pissy if she realizes that her 'hard work' has been deleted.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 9:35 pm

Wrong thread. Post deleted.

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PostSubject: Re: Unfinished Business [Fanfiction]   Tue Oct 25, 2011 9:37 pm

azureXtwilight wrote:
Wrong thread. Post deleted.

Oh Azure~ I love you when you come out of nowhere like this Smile

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