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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:21 am

It's not mine either Razz

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:22 am

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It's not mine either Razz


Your english is pretty good. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:25 am

Thanks. Yours is pretty good too. Is mega troll still posting stuff?

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:29 am

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Thanks. Yours is pretty good too. Is mega troll still posting stuff?


Dunno, but I want her to start posting again. Wink

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:31 am

Maybe she could be the doppelganger. Just read her doppelganger fic. How do you fit someone in a cupboard?

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:49 am

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Maybe she could be the doppelganger. Just read her doppelganger fic. How do you fit someone in a cupboard?



Umm...you cut their limbs and head off...maybe... Sweating
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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 2:39 am

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Maybe she could be the doppelganger. Just read her doppelganger fic. How do you fit someone in a cupboard?

THIS was the biggest mystery of all.

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 7:29 am

Maybe Belle could enlighten us a bit.

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Thu Jan 12, 2012 2:56 pm

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Maybe she could be the doppelganger. Just read her doppelganger fic. How do you fit someone in a cupboard?

THIS was the biggest mystery of all.

Well, since she destroyed the whole mystery about doppelgangers, she had to create a new mystery for her story.
And theone, I had the same problem with typos after reading Belle's fic XD
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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Fri Feb 24, 2012 1:55 am

Okay, I will try my best to write a solid review for your fanfic. Oh and by the way this review is not going to have any sarcasm in it so you don't have to worry about if I am being serious or not. Razz

Okay so first off, do you have the "check spelling" button checked? It really helps if you have to write your story in a short period of time or if you are not very good at spelling. Because to be honest your story....I can only understand half of it. I Seriously have to think about each and every line so that I can understand what you are trying to deliver to the readers.
Also, I noticed that you seem to be having a bit of trouble with coming up with words, instead of saying, "serious looking", try saying...erm..maybe "He/she looked quite dangerous ( or what you were trying to deliver) as they.." I know it isn't a very good example (because I am not a very good writer Razz) but what I am trying to say is that instead of telling people you should be adding detail to your sentences and showing them, in other words you should be mixing up your words instead of having the same ones over and over again. Also if you really want to show what color their eyes and hair are try to put them in a sentence instead of just saying something like this. " a man with blue hair came down the stairs" it would be better to say this " The man's blue hair shined as he came down the stairs".
I will write more of this review later but I hope it helped. Smile

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:05 am

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I'm reading the worst fanfiction in the history of fanfiction. I posted it in the Chat Forum ._.
It's a harry potter one, and it gets worse.
Worse than how Belle writes. want to read a sample? I lul'zd. Razz
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This is only a section, out of 45 chapters. ..I died. But I'm still reading it.
.....MY SPELLING CHECK IS GOING CRAZY!!! Laughing
also I didn't know that stories like that existed..

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:21 am

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I'm reading the worst fanfiction in the history of fanfiction. I posted it in the Chat Forum ._.
It's a harry potter one, and it gets worse.
Worse than how Belle writes. want to read a sample? I lul'zd. Razz
Spoiler:
 

This is only a section, out of 45 chapters. ..I died. But I'm still reading it.
.....MY SPELLING CHECK IS GOING CRAZY!!! Laughing
also I didn't know that stories like that existed..




WTF IS THIS?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Shocked Shocked Shocked

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Fri Feb 24, 2012 7:34 am

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darkdoll25 wrote:
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I'm reading the worst fanfiction in the history of fanfiction. I posted it in the Chat Forum ._.
It's a harry potter one, and it gets worse.
Worse than how Belle writes. want to read a sample? I lul'zd. Razz
Spoiler:
 

This is only a section, out of 45 chapters. ..I died. But I'm still reading it.
.....MY SPELLING CHECK IS GOING CRAZY!!! Laughing
also I didn't know that stories like that existed..




WTF IS THIS?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Shocked Shocked Shocked
I think I might have lost a part of my brain while reading it. Very Happy
I felt so smart while watching death note too. Laughing Becuase I got to use my mind.
Lets hope I can stay smart even after reading badfics . Cool

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Fri Feb 24, 2012 8:37 am

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avalongirl9 wrote:
darkdoll25 wrote:
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I'm reading the worst fanfiction in the history of fanfiction. I posted it in the Chat Forum ._.
It's a harry potter one, and it gets worse.
Worse than how Belle writes. want to read a sample? I lul'zd. Razz
Spoiler:
 

This is only a section, out of 45 chapters. ..I died. But I'm still reading it.
.....MY SPELLING CHECK IS GOING CRAZY!!! Laughing
also I didn't know that stories like that existed..




WTF IS THIS?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Shocked Shocked Shocked

My brain hurts after just TRYING to comprehend this... Mad
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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Fri Feb 24, 2012 6:04 pm

XD Actually that person is probably a troll who purposely wrote the fic that badly.
Belle's DEFINITELY a troll too.
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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Fri Feb 24, 2012 9:37 pm

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Kikyo Moon wrote:
avalongirl9 wrote:
darkdoll25 wrote:
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I'm reading the worst fanfiction in the history of fanfiction. I posted it in the Chat Forum ._.
It's a harry potter one, and it gets worse.
Worse than how Belle writes. want to read a sample? I lul'zd. Razz
Spoiler:
 

This is only a section, out of 45 chapters. ..I died. But I'm still reading it.
.....MY SPELLING CHECK IS GOING CRAZY!!! Laughing
also I didn't know that stories like that existed..




WTF IS THIS?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Shocked Shocked Shocked

My brain hurts after just TRYING to comprehend this... Mad
The worst thing about this is that she/he focused more on the outfits then the actual characters and story ( and spelling) And she/he said sexy at least 3 times to describe someone Laughing

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sat Feb 25, 2012 4:31 am

*nods*

My brain is in pain...

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sat Feb 25, 2012 4:26 pm

Same here, Kikyo

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sat Feb 25, 2012 7:57 pm

Because I read this crap I can't even write in english properly Shocked . ( ...and I've just started writing the script for my game... Sad ).

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sat Feb 25, 2012 8:39 pm

That stinks... (Have you drawn any characters yet?)
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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sat Feb 25, 2012 11:25 pm

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Because I read this crap I can't even write in english properly Shocked . ( ...and I've just started writing the script for my game... Sad ).
Your making a game?! Very Happy
That's so cool~! Razz Is there a link to the summary? Surprised

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sun Feb 26, 2012 12:17 am

Nope. I've just started. ( Now I'm composing some music and I've started writing the plot in a notebook. I need to learn how to draw first so I can make the sprites. )

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sun Feb 26, 2012 12:57 am

XD You can always find an artist, you know.
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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sun Feb 26, 2012 1:06 am

I don't have money to pay for an artist so I better start drawing on my own even if it will take a while... Sweating

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PostSubject: Re: ~*leons destiny*~ a fanfiction <3 ~~~~~~~ THE END!!!! ~~~~~~~~~   Sun Feb 26, 2012 1:43 am

If you want I could maybe do the art for free Very Happy I am not the best artist but I love to draw so.. Very Happy

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